Once again university graduates start a new round of job hunting. Young people nowadays make their choices for various reasons.
By announcing her decision of withdrawing from the Super Girl’s tour, Zhou Bichang has raised a flow of discussions among people who are concerned about her.
The Super Girl Zhou Bichang has declared a withdrawal from the Super Girl’s tour for the sake of studying, which results in a fierce argument.
Should you get prepared for the challenge, act now and get in touch with the Students’ Union.
If you should feel the urge to take this job, please get in touch with us as soon as possible.
If you are interested in the job and willing to spare some of your time to serve our school, please contact the Students’ Union.
Those who have an itch to do it, please make contact with the Students’ Union as soon as you can. ……
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对文章进行修饰,恰当地使用一些多样化的句式,使文章生动有趣,充满活力,既要避免千篇一律的简单句,又要避免过于复杂、堆砌而成的句子。可以鼓励学生使用非谓语动词结构、从句结构以及倒装、强调、感叹等句式;还要注意行文逻辑,避免出现思维的跳跃,可以合理使用连接词,增强文章的连贯性;还可以长短句交替使用,体现表达的节奏美。一名学生这样表达减负后的影响:I can go to bed earlier. Everyone is happy about this arrangement of things. 这句话明显缺乏连贯性,可改为Besides, I can go to bed earlier. As far as I know, everyone is happy about this arrangement.
A recent survey shows that the health of the students in our school has been going from bad to worse in the past three years.
Years have seen an increase in the number of nearsighted students from 78.2% in 2002 to 92.5% in 2005, when we are struggling in the flood of papers. At the same time, the number of students who are overweight has been on the rise. Studying the figures, you will find that more and more students can not reach a sound sleep. With the pressure becoming heavier and heavier, the number of mentally unhealthy students increases by 15.5% compared with that three years ago, which is the most outstanding point.
As success is based on good health, we should attach more importance to it.
这篇文章结构清晰,共有三个层次:第一段的主题句,第二段的图表分析和第三段的个人看法。语言得体流畅,体现了很强的语言运用能力。值得借鉴的有:(1)Years have seen an increase...when we are struggling in the flood of papers. (2)…has been on the rise. (3)…reach a sound sleep. (4)With the pressure becoming heavier and heavier…等。